Legend Of Zelda: Visions of a boy

[Pumpkin 0]

Redoing this fanfiction at a later date.

[Stormsworder 0]

Hm... Quite an interesting prologue to set the mood. Personally, it will be the first time for me reading a Zelda fanfic set into a more modern period than the games, so I'm interested in seeing how this goes.

Man, I wish I could write as descriptively as you though.. XD

[Pumpkin 0]

Lol. I don't see this descriptive writing you speak of. I completely forgot to add that they have a crude form of the gun. It would only make sense since they have the crude form of the engine, too. > < I forget these things.. But chapter one will most likely take me longer so I don't overlook something. I may or may not have it ready for today, and probably only late tonight if I am lucky.

Edit: Okay, sneaked in mention of the first guns in there. Time to work on chapter One now.

[Pumpkin 0]

Same as above

[Stormsworder 0]

*thumbs up* Man, you're amazingly good at setting backgrounds and stuff like that... I have a lot of stuff I need to learn from you. Can't wait to see more.

[Pumpkin 0]

Same as above. Aren't these messages interesting?

[Stormsworder 0]

Well, as i stated before, you're doing a pretty rockin' job... You need to just keep in mind what I told you about a new paragraph with every speaker. I used to have the problem of bunching them all together a long time ago. Just try to get yourself into the habit of doing that.

*gives two thumbs up* ^^

[Pumpkin 0]

Edited what I have so it makes more sense to readers xD

Thank my friend for helping me do that. I'm not nearly as good at English as she is.

[Pumpkin 0]

einhfowinh

[Stormsworder 0]

C'mon, you need to have better confidence with your fanfic, ya know. You're an amazingly talented writer, despite what you think.

I'm a bit out of it, so I can't completely scour this chapter, but it seems pretty fine to me. I like how the daring escape scene was written out Also, I like how Rula kinda seems like a brat at times... XD Nice contrast to Link.

[Pumpkin 0]

Lol. Yeah, she's supposed to be kind of a brat.

[Raffajel 0]

Hi pumpkin dude( sry...I guess you'll have another name)

I took my time to read this yesterday evening before going to sleep and

...really good! great talent, took your time to develop a nice story( very important) very nice backgrounds, being original!

the vast majority of writers just starts at full speed and crashes head-on into a lack of inspiration or will...

so.. I hope this encourages you to go on at your normal pace...'cause its absolutely worth it!

and ow, plz don't mind my erroros...I'm form Belgium:p

[Pumpkin 0]

Thank you very much for the words of encouragement. :3 I hope I won't let you down when I am finally finished with my next chapter.

[Raffajel 0]

Thank you very much for the words of encouragement. :3 I hope I won't let you down when I am finally finished with my next chapter.

You're welcome...I like reading before going to sleep and

sry...

"" and I enjoyed it...I'm sure you won't disappoint me with next chapter...I'll have a look at it when it comes out

greetings!

[Pumpkin 0]

I know it seems kind of pointless to post something without more fic, but I'd like to inform anybody who had the slightest bit of interest in my story that a new chapter will be done by the end of this month.

Just thought I'd throw that out there.