my own story for after the series preview

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I soon hit the first time disc it felt like I was punched in the stomach!a bit later I hit the second disc it was horrible it felt like I was shot on every limb I had!the third disc I called the triplester disc and it felt like highly compressed air hitting me.And the triplester disc was the first time warp disc meaning I am going backin time for every hour on my watch is a year in time but this wont work I need to go back 3000 year I calculated so I need to go to the next disc.but your thinking that I should be far from where I started right?nope! after the triplester disc I haven't moved at all. since I am going thru time I cant move! I knew this would happen so I made an electric shield on the quodrocoptor so I can move.now I have been flying for 6 hours so I have went thru 6 years now I throttled the motors and went on to the siptor disc now 10 minutes is 10 years!

 

 

 

i went thru grammer sites on this one

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Unfortunately, sites like that can't quite replicate actual knowledge of grammar. Again, as I said, if you are truly passionate about this, definitely go the extra mile to learn.

 

You also might want to consider writing longer excerpts so your writing allows for more content and build up, which could allow the reader to connect to the story much easier.

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i am making a quodrocoptor blue print right now

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well i mean its reference for it


 here it is

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There does not appear to be an image.

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i put the url in the thing why doesnt it show?

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If I were to guess, I'd say you were doing it wrong.

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it aint working


i put the file url in the thing     

 


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Have you uploaded it on the internet anywhere? On a website such as deviantart or photobucket?

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da soon

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That does not answer my question. Have you uploaded it online ANYWHERE yet?

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There you goooo.

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i will have the motor done soon


wat do you think


is it look ok to you brellom

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Well, that depends on whether or not you're asking for my objective opinion as an artist.

What I do think, however, is that since your project is primarily text, you don't have to worry about creating these grand extremely detailed drawings of all your stuff unless it's actually going to be a PRETTY BIG PROJECT.

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