Fan Fic Modern Zelda

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The Modern Zelda

PROLOGE: The New Beginning

Link jumped across the room he threw his sword at Ganondorf it made a huge cut in his face.

[Aatch 0]

Ok. I like the idea. But I'm a very harsh critic.

1. Learn to spell and use grammar. I can spot many mistakes. Such as using capitals where they shouldn't be used, and spelling "label" as both lable and label.

2. Punctuation. "The Comma" and "The Full Stop" are your friends. Please dont neglect them. It makes your work more readable and more interesting.

3. Content. There are 2 parts here. Firstly 4 paragraphs does not constitute a chapter. Even on a forum, where chapters are short. Its not enough. Secondly, tell a story, don't recount it. I'm somewhat surprised not to see a few "And then"s. I'll elaborate: You are using the "event-response" method of telling a story. For example "

[Mao 0]

Great story, but alot spelling and grammatical errors as Aatch said.

And welcome back Aatch. I havent seen you in awhile.

[Eka 387]

I like it, it shows promise, but yeah, I'de go with what Aatch stated, remember that when writing your next couple o' chapters and you should be ok. ^^

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K il start workin on chapter 1