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Lucas:*groan* where am i.

???:your in Nintendo world or N-world for short.

Lucas:where?

????:what you've never herd of Nintendo world!?

then Lucas opend his eyes and saw two round glowing spheres with wings like dragonfly wings floating in front of him. one was blue and one was red. at first he was surprised. he jumped back.

Lucas:what are you?

Tune&tia:were fairy's.

Tune:i'm Tune.

Tia:and i'm his sister Tia.

Lucas: ok but where am I?

Tune:don't you remember anything your in n-world. the great nexus to be precise

Lucas:but how,when,where?

now lucas was an ordinary boy who did ordinary things he lived in canada. but one day he and his friend jackson and he were hiking in the woods and they saw two lights floating around a glowing portal. they hid in a bush to listen to what they were saying

Tia:we have to find someone who can use the scanner.

Tune:but we've been serching all day lets head home and get some rest.

Tia:well i guess we could use some rest and somthing to eat couldent hurt.

Tune:ok then its settled tthrough the portal!

Portal:*glowing noise gets louder*

Tia *sigh* why does he always have to be so dramatick?

Portal:*glowing noise gets louder*

Lucas and Jackson came out from behind the bush.

Lucas:what were those things?

Jackson:hey look at this*Jackson throws a rock into the portal*

Lucas:quit it.

Jackson:why?

meanwhile on the other side of the portal a moblin was taking a nap when a rock hit him on the head

moblin:ouch!

then all of a sudden two unconscious boys fell from what seems to have been the sky the moblin stood in place for a while and ran screaming the sky is falling the sky is falling i must go tell ganondorf!

and that was all Lucas could remember.

to be

continude

well what do you think. could you post your rating from 1 to 10 :biggrin:

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why wont anyone answer me :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry:

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I will give this a 7/10 for now for it really is too little to rate. This looks like it could become a very good FanFic. A piece of advice: when you are showing a flashback, say something like : "4 HOURS EARLIER", or something to make sure the readers know it's a flashback. On another note, is the character named Lucas for a reason or is it just a coincidence that he has the same name as the character from "Mother 3"?

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ist just a coincadince and this is my first fanfic anyways thanks for the rating.

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Your welcome. When are you going to write the next part?

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Chapter 2

Lucas:oh yeah now i remember. but wheres Jackson?

Tia:oh that other kid he went to find something to eat.

Lucas:well he did win the hot dog eating contest 3 years in a row at the exhibition.

then they herd the galloping of hooves and they looked to see the moblin that was hit by the rock on his way along with a man that looked dark green he had red hair and a sword so long that it had to be sheeth'd by his side

Tune:oh jeez quick kid hide in that tree.

Lucas:what why.

Tune:Just do it.

*Lucas clumsily clime's the tree just in the nick of time*

moblin:it was right here when i left it your highness.

green man:well theres nothing here now fool. you wasted time that i could have used for plotting my revenge on that green boy.

moblin:sorry sire please don't throw me to the mutant cyborg alligators.

Green man:fine but the next time your wrong its to the alligators with you.

moblin:thank you sire thank you *kisses green mans feet*

Lucas:eeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwwww!

Green man:ssssshhhhhh what was that.

Lucas covered his mouth

Green man:hm must have been the wind. i shall be going back to the gerudo fortress to plot my revenge on the green boy. stand watch here number 24

Lucas and the fairy's watched as the green man rode off into another portal

Lucas:who was that guy?

Tune:he was the self proclaimd "king of theves" ganondorf. anyways whats your name kid?

Lucas:its Lucas.

Tune:its nice to meet ya Lucas

Tia:yeah yeah thats all good and nice but we've got to go before Lucas's friend gets himself himself into trouble

Lucas:oh crud Jackson!

meanwhile

Jackson:what do ya mean zenny only!?

hot dog vendor:the only thing this paper is good for is paper mashay

Jackson:what are you talking about this is a fifty dollar bill i saved two months allowance for this money?!

Boy in a blue robo suit:ill spotem.

hot dog vendor:thank you come again.

Jackson:thanks um.

megaman:just call me megaman

Jackson:ok thanks megaman

A FEW HOURS LATER

Lucas:tia tune weve i mean i've been walking for hours youve been sitting on my head the whole time

Jackson:hey look its my friends HI GUYS!

Lucas:hey look its Jackson HI JACKSON!

????:megaman i'm picking up some strange readings do you see anything?

megaman:yeah roll i see them.

Roll:alright commence battle.

Lucas:hey whats that blue guy dooing oh crud hes got some kind of plasma blaster double crud he fired it this way!

Tia&tune:quick use these.

Tia and Tune dropped a strange device and some cards in his hands

the device looked like a upside down boild egg if you cut off the sides so that only the tallest part was left and there was a screen on it and three buttons under the screen lable'd scan,swipe and fuse

the cards had different pictures of weapons on them

Lucas:what am i supposed to do with these!

Tune:press swipe and slide the card you want to use through the slit on the scanner

he swiped a card with a picture of a hammer on it and suddenly his hand dissapeard and was replaced with a sphere with a hammer stuck to it.

Tune:quick hit him with the hammer.

Lucas hit megaman with the hammer its a good thing megaman was wearing his helmet because he only had 1 hp left after the attack.

megaman braced himself for another attack.

Lucas: i'm not going to kill you i just want you to stop attacking me and my friends.

megaman:alright. sorry but i thought you were a reaverbot.

Lucas:whats a reaverbot?

megaman: oh sorry i assumed you knew what having that scanner and all. reaverbots are ancient robots that guard treasure and ruins.

Lucas:thats ok people make mistakes.

Roll:megaman can you read me it seems that those reaverbots aren't going to attack you.

megaman:dont worry roll they arent reaverbots there Jacksons friends.

to be continued :D

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Your welcome. When are you going to write the next part?

its already done as you can probably see and my maximum of chapters is 7 posted a week my minimum is 1 a week :wacko:

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Green Man? I never knew Ganon wore green... So, this is going to be a multi-game type FanFic, eh?

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Green Man? I never knew Ganon wore green... So, this is going to be a multi-game type FanFic, eh?

no, but he has green skin :P

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no, but he has green skin :P

thats exactly what i meant by green man

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I thought he had blue skin...

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no its really dark green

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oh! I meant oot ganon not lttp ganon :wacko:

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chapter 3

Megaman:were heading back to base Roll.

Roll:ok megaman ill have data send the support car.

megaman:thanks Roll.

Lucas:who was that?

megaman:she was my operator Roll

and just then a mechanical monkey driving a car rocketed past them and smashed into a tree luckily the force field was activated.

what megaman heard:quick megaman hop in!

what everyone else heard:eek ook ee ee ee!

Lucas:what?

megaman:he said get in the car.

Lucas:you speak monkey?

megaman:yes as a matter of fact i do

everyone shrugged got in the support car driven by data the monkey

after a bumpy trip on a long rode

in the flutters living room

Lucas:who are all those guys

Roll:the're the N-heroes they stop the villains from destroying n-world. you see the flutter acts as a mobile base for them. let me introduce you to them.

Roll:youve already met megaman,the kid and adult are link

Link's:hey

Lucas:hi

Roll:the blue hedgehog is sonic.

Sonic:yo.

Lucas:hey.

Roll:this is tails he's sonics friend.

Tails:greetings.

Lucas:hi.

Roll:thats knuckles beating that sandbag to shreds.

Knuckles:what is it know?

Lucas:....... *backs away slowly*

Roll:thats shadow.

Shadow:. . . . .

Lucas:ok?

Roll:thats Amy rose.

Amy:hello

Lucas:nice to meet you

Roll:this is kid Zelda and adult Zelda.

Zelda's:hello.

Lucas:hi.

Roll:this is malon.

Malon:hi.

Lucas:yo

Roll:this is "princess"ruto.

Ruto:I am to a princess!

Lucas:ok

Roll:this is darunia but you can just call him daru for short.

Daru:salutations.

Lucas:hello.

Roll:I think you've met everyone.

Navi:wait you forgot me navi the fairy.

Tia&tune:oh hi cousin navi!

Navi:hi cousin Tia hi cousin Tune

Roll:well I think its time for bed good night.

everyone els thought it was a good idea eventually everyone was in bed

to be continued

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the attachments above are of Lucas and Jackson

the one in the middle is Jackson and the ones to the sides are of Lucas

Edited by real link (see edit history)

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