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Heroes of Destiny

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The Fall of Hyrule

The Chamber of the Triforce was peacefully quiet. In the middle of the room was the Triforce. Surrounding it were legendary items recovered by a great warrior, including the Ocarina of Time, Majora

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I could probably say a million things, but the first thing I will tell you is to use paragraph spacing.

Jesus.

Also, many of your paragraphs aren't really related to each other and don't have a lot of build. Some of them read like backstories or something.

Break up your wall of text, and then I'll consider an actual review.

Sahaqiel

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i think its awsome :D

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i think its awsome :D

Thanks, real link

Drona

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