Metal Brawlin' Minis

[Double45 164]

ok, before i officially start this topic, does this seem like a nerdy idea?

Its not going to be a comic or anything, its going to be just a story with

pictures, it revolves around Mini brawl characters, Metal Toon Link, Metal

Lucas, and Metal Kirby.

Here is the team

Chapter 1: 10 years ago

10 years ago the team met in a field to face Metal Bowser. Link took out his sword

and face the end of the blade towards Bowser. That was the signal. Kirby rushed

foward in a fireball, Lucas used PK thunder, and Toon Link rushed foward waving his

sword around. Bowser smacked Kirby against a tree, But was hit by Lucas's PK

thunder. Bowser look at Lucas, fury in his eyes. Lucas started backing up.

Bowser started rushing foward, only to be knocked flat by Toon Link. Toon Link

gave Lucas the diversion signal. Lucas nodded. Lucas Started running

around bowser, while Toon Link got his bow ready. Toon Link was ready.

He let go of the string. Its went strait for the head. The Beast was dead

so thats the first chapter, my chapters are probably going to be paragraphs

most of the time.

Edited 6 Aug 2008 by Goron Merchant (see edit history)

[Cat Girl 0]

This is kool, although it'd be nice if there was dialogue.

[Sahaqiel 1232]

If there's no fan fiction in your fan fiction, then it has no place being here.

Please write something or delete your thread for later.

Sahaqiel

[Goron Merchant 1]

YEAH! This is awesome. I like the pictures.

And Saha, the section is entitled "Fan Fiction & Stories." I don't think that it has to be a fanfic, but I'm not sure. Where else would something like this go?

[Sahaqiel 1232]

It would be in the Hylian Art Gallery, I suppose?

The standard for the majority of the fan fiction forums on the internet normally includes "Your fan fiction has to be there. It cannot be an announcement that you will start working on it later" or something to that effect.

Sahaqiel

[Goron Merchant 1]

Oh. He posted Chapter 1 below his other post. I'll merge them..

[Naruto1253 0]

If there's no fan fiction in your fan fiction, then it has no place being here.

Please write something or delete your thread for later.

Sahaqiel

You can't tell him/her what to do!!! You are not the boss of anyone but yourself!! He/she does not have to delete it!! It can be what ever he/she wants!!! Oh!! and that was an awesome story!!!!

Edited 10 Aug 2008 by Naruto1253 (see edit history)

[Sahaqiel 1232]

... For one, I'm a moderator, and for two, it's against the rules to post something that is not fan fiction or original fiction in a place where it's meant to be.

I'm not the boss of him, but it is somewhat a job to keep the forums in check...

And I even told him to delete it for later nicely.

I'm not going to rate this fiction for various reasons which I will NOT explain, because some people won't learn to use criticism to their advantage and take it positively. Do you know how long I just SIT HERE and type mindlessly? I have free time too, but I choose to use it to correct YOUR mess and prepare you against making mistakes again.

I could be doing other things, but instead, I try to get people to write at least marginally better.

And what do I get? Some random person going around rating my two most popular stories low without even posting, without explaining, without even PMing hate mail to me.

Consider what I do, and try to help me help you.

Sahaqiel