The Air Ride Saga Episode 1

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Once a long time ago in a city far far away from human contact there lived inhabitants. They built a highly advanced transportation named Air Ride Machines that could go at very high speeds and velocity, depending on what machine you have. However

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Enjoy reading! And if you flame well, screw you!

[Sahaqiel 1232]

Please at least TRY to paragraph space.

You've given me a giant wall of text.

Sahaqiel

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Not a bad read, but it could really use some restructuring... it's hard to tell sometimes where you're splitting to a different part of the story, or still in a moment of dialogue between characters. Keep that in mind when you write your next piece

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cool. is pink kirby gonna be a good guy?

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, kinda cool, I still play kirby air ride every chance i have lol

[Sahaqiel 1232]

Hey

http://hyrule.net/forum/index.php?showtopic=3882

Rules.

Please read them.

Post chapters in the original thread. Don't make another thread for each chapter.

Sahaqiel

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To me, it just looks like an unreadable mass of squiggles and letters.

Paragraphs help keep the world from going to hell.

Yeah.

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Absolute most STUPIDEST spam i've EVER seen!

To me, it just looks like an unreadable mass of squiggles and letters.

Paragraphs help keep the world from going to hell.

Yeah.

.......

OM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOM NOMZ