The Air Ride Saga (Complete)

[odd 0]

The Air Ride Saga (Complete)

The Air ride Saga! Episode 1.

Once a long time ago in a city far far away from human contact there lived inhabitants. They built a highly advanced transportation named Air Ride Machines that could go at very high speeds and velocity, depending on what machine you have. However

[Negation 1]

No. Just... Just no. For one thing, you don't need a seperate topic for every fanfic you write. Secondly, PLAY TRANSCRIPT FANFICS = FAIL. To illustrate my point,:

Bob: Hi Jim.

Jim: Oh wow I just popped out of nowhere, didn't I?

Bob: Now what the...-

Fred: Ha ha, stupid Bob just fell into a black hole...

Jim: No he died of a terminal disease.

Frank: When the hell did I come into this?

Bob: I'mma back, now feel the powah of mah lazar!

Fred: Oh great, now the whole fanfic's gone to heck...

So yeah. You need to EXPLAIN things.

Last, but not least, "1000 feet away" never, ever, EVER made sense.

Don't call this spamming. It isn't. It's merely critisism with a slight amount of constructive help in it. It's not flaming either, for the same reason.

[odd 0]

If you don't like it don't read it. Got any problems? Ring it up with my buddy Sahaqiel, asshole.

[odd 0]

How bout this. You+spam= FAIL

[Koltem 0]

You+double post= retarded

Learn to take criticism. You'll get a lot.

Billy: Your video was great, but it needs more.....POW....to it ya know?

odd: **** mother **** in the ****** **** you in my ***** go to ****

Get some help. Manage your anger.

And censor cussing, cause those is kinda the rules.