Posted 21 Mar 2014 i am making a story for after the zelda series i will be making a preview here in a few days CidaShipiniZH likes this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 22 Mar 2014 Uh, i doubt the LoZ series will be ending any time soon. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 22 Mar 2014 well true but they wont make it to this time and ara Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 22 Mar 2014 Do you mean to say you're making a zelda story that takes place after the events of the zelda universe? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 22 Mar 2014 If you're doing a present-day/future Zelda, more power to you. A guy here wrote a present-day Zelda once and it was pretty neat. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 22 Mar 2014 THE LEGEND OF ZELDA THE DESCENDANTS It a long time ago in hyrule when my grand father made the choice to be hero of time now what does his great great great great great great grandson do hes the protector of the world!!!! Ha ya right . Ms.Rimbiest . would laugh if i said that aloud i am a protector of the Rimbiest farm.And what that means is I keep it safe from Carptise. carptice a huge hard skinned lizards with quills on its back and its tail. their eggs are rolled in dirt so you don't see them in a field to well . but my job is to search for the egg because the are easier to kill when they are an egg. when they hatch in a mater of hours the are hard as the parents and some how the parents find they kids back to protect them will they harden! this is the first part in a few days i will put the next one signed Hevury Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 23 Mar 2014 this is really difficult to read. You need to practice your grammar, spelling, and exposition. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 24 Mar 2014 And once they harden we call in a plain that sprays a chemical on them to soften the shell then we hunt them down.my dad once said ",don't try you will fail but if you do you will succeed,"that was 3 years before he died i am adopted by the Rimbiest family. now i fight carptice and in my spare time make my hobby grow! My hobby is inventing the quodrocoptor a special flyer that can reach a speed level i calculated would make time go backwards or forwards. if fast enough i am afraid to try it tho because i don't know the out come of going thru the time wave would do to humans.I keep making calculations trying to find if it is safe but i can t make calculations on the past very easy.i want to try it but if i go back in time the present continues with out me till i get back witch was my biggest worry. one day i noticed my blue prints for the motors were missing then a few weeks latter i found out all my blue print were missing some one was going to try to go back thru time! i was shocked when i found out!then some thing happened 3 days later there were weird white spots on the ground people were falling thru! I went home to my shop hoped on the quodrocoptor and started it it putted and roared then i noticed fizzing it had no cooling oil i used the reserve tank and took off flying hearing Ms.Rimbiest yelling because i left in my head i thought ,"If i take to long the carptice will invade.i would mess time strips up if i went back to were i left and fought them. so i couldn't. well this will test my new grammar check! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 24 Mar 2014 Is english not your first language? I'd suggest getting an editor. iirc someone I know has one because english isn't their first language. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 25 Mar 2014 Your story is brilliant. Please keep writing. hevury, PrimaGaga and pheonix561 like this Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 25 Mar 2014 thank you i will i am making reel sketches of the quodrocoptor to i only know English i just suck at grammer Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 25 Mar 2014 Aah. If you are serious about this, I suggest improving your grammar and writing ability, even if you do so somewhere down the line. Your story idea is a pretty cool one, but it's readability would be a lot higher if the grammar were better. Good luck with your story, man. c: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 25 Mar 2014 Yeah honestly, i dont even know what your story is about. It's nearly impossible to read. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Posted 25 Mar 2014 will any of you volunteer to correct it because my mind make me see it fine Share this post Link to post Share on other sites